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Postby wabbit3119 on Thu Aug 20, 2009 5:02 pm

And i will be covering the Coyotes
http://hockey-bums.com/archives/1401
this is my first entry to the site, as an intro, and if you guys would like, check me out, i will be writing multiple articles about them, and I will try to find out inside information that I will gladly share with you guys!
Here is the Link to the main site
http://hockey-bums.com/
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Re: I have now become an Official Blogger for Hockey Bums &...

Postby CBL on Fri Aug 21, 2009 4:31 pm

Looks interesting, just revise a bit more. I know it's a blog, but that doesn't mean you have to lose control of conventions...

No big boo-boos:
1. Make sure to capitalize your "I"s (it's a blog, not a text message :) ).
2. Unless it's a letter, why capitalize "Everyone"
3. Tip : avoid using "just," "a lot," "very," and other informal words. Again, I know it's a blog, but does it take extra time to say "many" (or "a number of") instead of a lot?

NOTE: Sorry if I sound like I'm nitpicking, but I'm trying to hone my grammar skills a bit...

NOTE 2: my above comments are based on looking at both blogs...
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Re: I have now become an Official Blogger for Hockey Bums &...

Postby wabbit3119 on Fri Aug 21, 2009 4:56 pm

CBL wrote:Looks interesting, just revise a bit more. I know it's a blog, but that doesn't mean you have to lose control of conventions...

No big boo-boos:
1. Make sure to capitalize your "I"s (it's a blog, not a text message :) ).
2. Unless it's a letter, why capitalize "Everyone"
3. Tip : avoid using "just," "a lot," "very," and other informal words. Again, I know it's a blog, but does it take extra time to say "many" (or "a number of") instead of a lot?

NOTE: Sorry if I sound like I'm nitpicking, but I'm trying to hone my grammar skills a bit...

NOTE 2: my above comments are based on looking at both blogs...

Thank you for your insight, I don't mind picky :lol:
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Re: I have now become an Official Blogger for Hockey Bums &...

Postby CBL on Fri Aug 21, 2009 7:51 pm

Now, if I can get Cleduc and Jeffrey to review their "its" and "it's" (unless that's a Canadian thing), I will be satisfied that grammar will have been improved slightly on CoyotesCorner. :)
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